In Class Writing 11/29 (Concerns about Policy/Proposal Essay)

I think that my paper turned out pretty well, but I'm not so sure that the structure is exactly what was expected of me. I talked about the problem for a long time and my thesis isn't until the second or third page of my essay because it took so long to put the problem in perspective. Mainly I'm just worried about the organization of the essay and whether it makes sense and flows well or not.